DEVOTION
It was an awkward moment when Gil ran into Marci at the pharmacy on a cold December evening.
Their last night together - what had it been, four years, five maybe - had not ended well.
But she seemed genuinely happy to see him; and, damn, she looked good.
She looked so inviting, even eager, as she invited him to her apartment to catch up, "for old time's sake."
Gil took off his gloves, looked pointedly at the ring finger of his left hand, sighed wistfully, and said, "Thanks, but I need to get home."
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Devotion indeed. He let her down beautifully with just the right note of regret.
ReplyDeleteNicely done.
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I honestly didn't know where this was headed. Super glad to read that last sentence :)
ReplyDeleteGreat job!
Very nice!
ReplyDeleteVery nicely done - enjoued it!
ReplyDeleteI like this. Good thinking!
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good man!
ReplyDeleteDevotion as it was intended. A lovely story of temptation denied. Excellent write!
ReplyDeletewell told :)) really nicely done!
ReplyDeleteReally lovely!
ReplyDeleteI was right there, watching that. Nice work.
ReplyDeleteNice to see a story about good guy who knows where the line of integrity is drawn. Good piece!
ReplyDeleteI'm so glad I went back and read this piece. Yes, he's devoted now, but after reading the follow-up I wonder how long it will last.
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