The Lighter Side of JzB

Here you will find photos, poetry, and possibly some light-hearted foolishness. For the Heavier Side
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Every day visits*
From Moose, Goose, and Orb Weaver
All seized by Haiku


"Why moose and goose?" you may ask. Back on 2/04/13 Pirate wrote a haiku with an elk in it, and I responded with
one with a moose and then included him every day. A few days later in comments Mystic asked "Where's the goose?"
So I started including her with this post on 2/07. A week later on the 14th, Mark Readfern
asked for and received a spider. The rest is history.

*Well, most days, anyway. Grant me a bit of poetic license.

Monday, September 25, 2017

Carpe Diem Weekend Meditation - on the river

This time our challenge is to construct a troiku.

It is based on the haiku by Basho, seen below.

This took a light-hearted turn that surprised me.

I always strive to have proper form: phrase and fragment structure and 1st-3rd line interchangeability.

The last one took some effort, but I think I got there.   Actually, I think it works better 3rd line first.

~:~

on the river
lights float to the horizon
the dead rejoice

© Basho


on the river
children dangle their bare feet
fish nibble on toes

lights float to the horizon
as children stare in awe
a phalanx of fireflies

the dead rejoice
on the bank of the river
 lively children frolic

~:~


5 comments:

  1. You brought a flash back to my own childhood swimming in a local farm pond. The tickle of the minnows on my arms and legs!

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    1. Hope that flash black was enjoyable.

      When we were at Black Lake this summer, I sat on the dock and minnows would nibble at my toes.

      Otherwise, I probably wouldn't have thought of this.

      Namaste
      JzB

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  2. Nice troiku, you brought me there:)

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