This one actually pleases me quite a bit.
my little green lawn
dreams about the pampas grass
i dream of the stars (c) Jazzbumpa
in their pale shimmering light
the universe stands open (c) Jazzbumpa
I'll be around to check all your completions in a day or so.
Thanks for playing along.
It provides all the challenges to move forward. That is true! Nicely JZB!
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A lovely completion. By the way, I noticed and enjoyed your tags on this one :)
ReplyDeletea beautiful and appropriate completion....
ReplyDeleteSuch a lovely first haiku and the wonderful completion too
ReplyDeleteAn open universe.. a wonderful (and also frightening) thought
ReplyDeletegorgeous use of the universe, Jazz.
ReplyDeleteLike a collective consciousness... that's the way I read it. Very nice.
ReplyDeleteBeautifully composed second stanza JzB ... I like this completed Tan Renga.
ReplyDeleteA fitting completion to your lovely Haiku JB-loved the possibilities of Universe standing open:-)Thank you for sharing your Haiku for this challenge-enjoyed this one:-)
ReplyDeleteLovely.
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