The Lighter Side of JzB

Here you will find photos, poetry, and possibly some light-hearted foolishness. For the Heavier Side
of JzB see my other blog, Retirement Blues. (There be dragons!)

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Every day visits*
From Moose, Goose, and Orb Weaver
All seized by Haiku

"Why moose and goose?" you may ask. Back on 2/04/13 Pirate wrote a haiku with an elk in it, and I responded with
one with a moose and then included him every day. A few days later in comments Mystic asked "Where's the goose?"
So I started including her with this post on 2/07. A week later on the 14th, Mark Readfern
asked for and received a spider. The rest is history.

*Well, most days, anyway. Grant me a bit of poetic license.

Friday, January 16, 2015

Carpe Diem Sparkling Stars #16,




The goal is to write an all new classical haiku inspired on the one given.

kaerimireba yuki-aishi hito kasumi keri

when I looked back,
the man who passed
was lost in the mist

© Masaoka Shiki

I have an almost surreal quasi-zen notion of perception vs reality, the virtual vs the concrete.  That is what I'm attempting to capture.

I don't see a kigo in Shiki's example, so I'll let myself get away without one, in my first attempt anyway.    Otherwise, I think I've met the classical requirements.

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the man i see there
when i leave the mirror
does he stay behind

 © JzB 

 ~~::~~

image in the weeds
behind the orb weaver's web
shadow of a fly

 © JzB





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  1. brudbergJanuary 17, 2015 at 6:53 AM

    I like the mirror image, that question a lot. Profound.

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  2. carol l mckennaJanuary 17, 2015 at 9:49 AM

    Both are very creative and express a lot to ponder ~ Say hi to 'moose and goose.'

    Happy Weekend to you,
    artmusedog and carol

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