The Lighter Side of JzB

Here you will find photos, poetry, and possibly some light-hearted foolishness. For the Heavier Side
of JzB
see my other blog,
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Every day visits*
From Moose, Goose, and Orb Weaver
All seized by Haiku


"Why moose and goose?" you may ask. Back on 2/04/13 Pirate wrote a haiku with an elk in it, and I responded with
one with a moose and then included him every day. A few days later in comments Mystic asked "Where's the goose?"
So I started including her with this post on 2/07. A week later on the 14th, Mark Readfern
asked for and received a spider. The rest is history.

*Well, most days, anyway. Grant me a bit of poetic license.

Tuesday, January 13, 2015

Carpe Diem - Techniques 2 - Onomatapoeia






Visiting CD again after a long haiku hiatus.

Today's assignment is to build a haiku using onomatopoeia.  I have my doubts about the first one, also filled with alliteration and finishing with an unhaiku-like pun.  But it is a vivid image, captures a moment in time, and meets the assignment requirement.  Numbers two and 3 bring back my old friends.

With a little effort, I also got a caesura and first-third line interchangeability in each of them.  It feels pretty good.   You can decide if there's a hint of a deeper meaning.


 
growling and gnashing
the gnarly ancient guard dog
gathering cur-age

~~:~:~~

the distant goose honks
counterpoint to lowing moose
in gathering fog

~~:~:~~ 

delicate plunking
as fly plucks the spider's web
music to her feet


~~:~:~~

8 comments:

  1. Imagine! JzB and his enigmatic, onomatopoetic moose, goose and orb-weaver have returned! How blessed we are! ;)

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    1. Thanks, Mystic. Great to "see" you.
      Cheers!
      JzB

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  2. Good to see you here again JzB .... you were missed. That third verse is really my favorite and it's a real onomatopoeic haiku. Chapeau!

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  3. I like the fly plucking the spider's web. But I think i like the tone in the second one best -- cold and lonely yet beautiful.

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  4. Missed you. And look at this trio. You been saving up creative juices.

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  5. Hi! missed your lovely haiku and glad to see you back ... these are really lovely and fun!

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  6. also like the alliteration in the first one

    much love...

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