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Every day visits*
From Moose, Goose, and Orb Weaver
All seized by Haiku

"Why moose and goose?" you may ask. Back on 2/04/13 Pirate wrote a haiku with an elk in it, and I responded with
one with a moose and then included him every day. A few days later in comments Mystic asked "Where's the goose?"
So I started including her with this post on 2/07. A week later on the 14th, Mark Readfern
asked for and received a spider. The rest is history.

*Well, most days, anyway. Grant me a bit of poetic license.

Monday, September 22, 2014

Carpe Diem "Analyze that haiku" #2, "seeking for relief"

seeking for relief
aching of a broken heart -
love isn 't forever

© Chèvrefeuille

Analyze the haiku, try to tell the story behind the haiku ... let the given haiku come to life ... see it in front of your eyes ... feel it with all your senses ... be part of the haiku ... maybe it helps to read the haiku aloud more than twice ... try to come in touch with the haiku. Share your thoughts, your analysis with us all ... and try to write/compose a new haiku with the story you analyzed from the haiku.

I could make this very personal.

Instead, though, I'll talk about a scene from the movie Crazy, Stupid, Love. [You can see my review of it here]  Emily Watson [Julianne Moore] is driving slowly down a residential street with her husband Cal [Steve Carell] in the passenger seat, when she confesses to him that she is having an affair with David Lindhagen [Kevin Bacon], and now wants a divorce.  Cal's response is to open the car door and spill out into the street.

The rest of the convoluted plot weaves a web of relationships and proto-relationships involving Cal and Emily's family members.  One of the major sub-plots is Cal's attempt to find relief through an extended series of brief and meaningless affairs.

Through it all, though, he never gets over his love for Emily - at least not within the scope of the movie's time line.  Her feelings are not so clear.  So - though love isn't necessarily forever - it could be.  Then again, maybe not.

though that thing happened
I can't pinpoint the moment
I fell out of love

Carpe Diem "Analyze that haiku" #2, "seeking for relief"



  1. Wonderful post. Using a real 'case study' is a very good idea.

  2. Haha. I watched the trailer to that movie. "Seriously? It's like you're photoshopped!."

    Great senryu take on the prompt. I love the phrase (L2 an L3) it's very strong and could be used as part of a tanka.

  3. Haven't seen it, but it seems to represent many relationships.
    I like your case study as well.

  4. Can't pinpoint that moment -- so very painfully powerful, and very painfully real.

  5. Something happened but that wasn't when the love ended. I've seen it so many times. Good one JzB

  6. Nice ... and loved the haiku ... like the can't pinpoint the moment ... I agree that love, the feeling inside of us .. can maybe live on forever ... at least whist we still live.


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