A shot at minimalism: the 12 target words all used in a 17 word
sentence Dedicated to Red State Republican Legislators.
sentence Dedicated to Red State Republican Legislators.
We men think of a way - or wish for that power: women bound within a single damaged thread.
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Twelve Haiku
First lines extracted from
The fine slender taut
THREAD of ribbon (convention?)
Held her in its bind.
THREAD of ribbon (convention?)
Held her in its bind.
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Descended, her red hair
Once BOUND, now unbound, flows free
As she races on.
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When the young distraught
MEN sought her for their pleasure
She would laugh at them.
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Loveliness demands
The attention of my heart.
Such is its POWER.
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And I too commenced
WITHIN the ancient mystic
ritual - to hope.
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Her delicious hands,
When they waved in a certain
WAY kept hope alive
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With that golden cloud
of mystery around us
WE shared one moment.
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I praised her as I
Could at that SINGLE time
Before she grew old.
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Perversely proud, all
Thoughts WITHIN sought to deny
That her youth was gone.
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Painting her portrait
The artist just hinted at
Her DAMAGED beauty
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By sea Reflections
All She could THINK of were those
New wrinkles and old pearls.
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Young breasts, slim flanks: and
memories of old WOMEN
From when they conquered.
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Since she was dead I
Could only despairingly
WISH that she were not.
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Oops - it's 13. I used WITHIN twice.No extra charge.
Excellent haiku. I especially like the thread of the female that runs through the pieces.
ReplyDeleteYou're getting rather good at weaving long stories with short stanzas!
ReplyDeleteThanks.
ReplyDeleteI didn't really plan to have the haiku weave a story, but as I discovered them, it started to look like to was going to work.
Pulling it together was fun.
JzB
Really well done!
ReplyDeleteAnd congratulations on your Honorable Mention in last week's Limerick-Off. Great job! Limerick of the Week 85.
Great from first to last!
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