The Lighter Side of JzB

Here you will find photos, poetry, and possibly some light-hearted foolishness. For the Heavier Side
of JzB see my other blog, Retirement Blues. (There be dragons!)

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Every day visits*
From Moose, Goose, and Orb Weaver
All seized by Haiku

"Why moose and goose?" you may ask. Back on 2/04/13 Pirate wrote a haiku with an elk in it, and I responded with
one with a moose and then included him every day. A few days later in comments Mystic asked "Where's the goose?"
So I started including her with this post on 2/07. A week later on the 14th, Mark Readfern
asked for and received a spider. The rest is history.

*Well, most days, anyway. Grant me a bit of poetic license.

Thursday, August 22, 2013

Carpe Diem Special #53, Kikaku's "a flock of swallows"


above the sea
a rainbow, erased by
a flock of swallows

(c) Kikaku


In this haiku I sense conflicting feelings.  A flock of swallows shouldn't represent ugliness, but here they destroy a thing of beauty.  Is this irony, a chance observation, or a comment on the sometimes cruel indifference of nature?


~ 1 ~

beside the pavement
a roadkill carcass consumed
by vultures

~ 2 ~

in the stormy sky
a flying chevron of geese
erased by lightning

~ 3 ~

lovely butterfly
a rainbow color riot
wrapped in sticky silk

~~~

Carpe Diem Special #53

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4 comments:

  1. Siggi in Downeast MaineAugust 22, 2013 at 11:36 PM

    You are so right...depressing...but your haiku
    are right on the money for the prompt.
    Thanks for sharing,☺
    Siggi

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  2. ChèvrefeuilleAugust 23, 2013 at 12:06 AM

    I hadn't realized that the imagery in Kikaku's haiku is that sad as you have described here JzB, but I have read the haiku again and ... yeah I felt the same sadness as you describe here.
    And the haiku you have written as a reaction on the one by Kikaku are gorgeous. That 3rd haiku is my favorite by the way.

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    1. JazzbumpaAugust 23, 2013 at 9:56 AM

      i wondered if my take on this was all wrong

      the permanence of the word "erased" made me think about it this way

      several others took it similarly i discovered

      Cheers!
      JzB

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  3. brudbergAugust 24, 2013 at 5:22 PM

    Oh I love the darkness here...

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