The Lighter Side of JzB

Here you will find photos, poetry, and possibly some light-hearted foolishness. For the Heavier Side
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Every day visits*
From Moose, Goose, and Orb Weaver
All seized by Haiku

"Why moose and goose?" you may ask. Back on 2/04/13 Pirate wrote a haiku with an elk in it, and I responded with
one with a moose and then included him every day. A few days later in comments Mystic asked "Where's the goose?"
So I started including her with this post on 2/07. A week later on the 14th, Mark Readfern
asked for and received a spider. The rest is history.

*Well, most days, anyway. Grant me a bit of poetic license.

Friday, August 30, 2013

Carpe Diem's Tan Renga Challenge #12, Southard's "the swing of the gate".

I must admit, I don't get what is going on with this haiku.  What do the phrase and fragment have to do with each other?  I can't make sense of any of it.  Given that, I do like Kristjaan's 2nd Stanza, and will attempt one of my own.   Wish me luck.

First stanza (5-7-5):

Just the cellarpit;
only the catbird recalls
the swing of the gate                                                    (Southard)

Second stanza (7-7):

and high in the catbird seat
swings to its squeaky rhythm                                       (JzB)



[Is there any other English language two-syllable word that contains only a single vowel?]

Carpe Diem's Tan Renga Challenge #12

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4 comments:

  1. ChèvrefeuilleAugust 30, 2013 at 4:59 PM

    Awesome JzB ... I like the humor of the twist in this Tan Renga completion. Thank you for your effort to write and share haiku at Carpe Diem.

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  2. brudbergAugust 31, 2013 at 9:18 AM

    Ohh this was nice

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  3. WabiSabiAugust 31, 2013 at 2:00 PM

    I love your play on words! I found this to be a challenge too!

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  4. UnknownSeptember 1, 2013 at 5:22 PM

    I agree with you on the fragmented feel
    I wasn't sure I caught what I was supposed to

    saying that I think your rendition is delightful
    guess we just need to ask Kristjaan to prompt us with this form some more...

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