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Every day visits*
From Moose, Goose, and Orb Weaver
All seized by Haiku

"Why moose and goose?" you may ask. Back on 2/04/13 Pirate wrote a haiku with an elk in it, and I responded with
one with a moose and then included him every day. A few days later in comments Mystic asked "Where's the goose?"
So I started including her with this post on 2/07. A week later on the 14th, Mark Readfern
asked for and received a spider. The rest is history.

*Well, most days, anyway. Grant me a bit of poetic license.

Sunday, February 22, 2015

Carpe Diem # 672 and Imaginary Garden Play It again #14

If any of my Imaginary Garden peeps are interested in haiku I highly recommend Chèvrefeuille's Carpe Diem Haiku Kai.   This month we are exploring impressionist paintings, and today's selection is “Sonce” (Sun) by Slovenian impressionist Rihard Jakopič (1869-1943).

Obviously, the I G archive challenge I've chosen is Grace's Old Pond from 2/15/12.  
The key idea this painting is chosen to illustrate is Summer.  I am keying on the sun as a summer kigo.  Also, I'll point out a couple of other haiku techniques.  In English language haiku the cutting word is often implied by what is known as phrase and fragment structure.   With this approach, between the phrase and fragment is an implies caesura, and grammar, as such, is not particularly important.  In fact, a specific goal is to avoid a 17 syllable run-on sentence.  Another goal in an elegant haiku is first-third line interchangeability.  The idea is that if you read the lines in reverse order, the ideas and images persist.   I'll try to illustrate that with my group of three examples.  A haiku should also suggest a deeper meaning.  I'm not sure I've achieved that.

Here's a remarkable summer song that I'll pay homage to along the way.

Here are three haiku with very different takes on the summer sun.

in the cotton fields
black men stooped under the sun
work does not make free


as the bright sun proves
sumer is icumin in
sing lusty cuckoo


sun’s bright morning light
over blooms and my window
lazy bee hovers



  1. Love the madrigal! Now that's the joy of summer :)
    But no. Work does not make one free. :(

    You've achieved that phrase and fragment admirably with that implied caesura -- so, well done!!!!

  2. I love how the sun image touches time specially that medieval English rota... ...musical...

  3. I love the progression from the hard works of cotton field to the lazy bee.. Read as little images this trul came together for me.

  4. Great trio JzB that progression in these haiku is really stunning ... really nicely done. And thank you for your kind remark to Carpe Diem Haiku Kai.

  5. Enjoyed them all; love the last one especially.

  6. I love the twist on work makes you free in the first one.

  7. Thanks, all

    Funny thing is, I didn't consider the progression on any conscious level,
    and was surprised when Bjorn mentioned it.
    But yeah - it's there.


  8. I love the set, specially the last one ~

  9. I really enjoyed this series of haiku from the first one which is so poignantly true to the beautiful summer morning with the lazy bees ... chapeau!

  10. Three completely different images beneath a blazing summer sky! Well done.


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