The Lighter Side of JzB

Here you will find photos, poetry, and possibly some light-hearted foolishness. For the Heavier Side
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Every day visits*
From Moose, Goose, and Orb Weaver
All seized by Haiku

"Why moose and goose?" you may ask. Back on 2/04/13 Pirate wrote a haiku with an elk in it, and I responded with
one with a moose and then included him every day. A few days later in comments Mystic asked "Where's the goose?"
So I started including her with this post on 2/07. A week later on the 14th, Mark Readfern
asked for and received a spider. The rest is history.

*Well, most days, anyway. Grant me a bit of poetic license.

Tuesday, February 3, 2015

Carpe Diem Haiku Writing Techniques #5

Comparison


"In the words of Betty Drevniok: 'In haiku the SOMETHING and the SOMETHING ELSE are set down together in clearly stated images. Together they complete and fulfill each other as ONE PARTICULAR EVENT.' She rather leaves the reader to understand that the idea of comparison is showing how two different things are similar or share similar aspects."


From Flickr



cherry blossom rain
young girls with pink parasols
watched by eager boys

~~::~~

angry honking goose
moose lows in desperation
far from city noise

~~::~~

on a stormy day
a fisherman mends his nets
orb weaver spinning


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6 comments:

  1. PirateGunnFebruary 3, 2015 at 3:06 PM

    That first one is gorgeous - though of course, the clasic one is the second, goes without saying! Again, a nice series.

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  2. Gillena CoxFebruary 3, 2015 at 4:49 PM

    yea, the first is my favourite also

    much love...

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  3. jazzytowerFebruary 3, 2015 at 10:16 PM

    I like them all, the first one has me longing for spring:)

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  4. UnknownFebruary 4, 2015 at 2:40 PM

    you always delight with words and smiles. he 1st and 3rd seems to peer from around a corner (or parasol)

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  5. ChèvrefeuilleFebruary 5, 2015 at 7:07 PM

    A Masterpiece JzB your first haiku of this post. Really great. I have used it for our upcoming Tan Renga Challenge Friday 6th if you don't mind of course.

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  6. Bastet's Waka LibraryFebruary 7, 2015 at 2:12 AM

    These are wonderful! And I was so happy to be able to write for your haiku for Tan Renga! Ciao, Bastet

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